Name : Rr. Risang Ayu Dewayani Putri
Number
: 15
Class : XI-Akselerasi
Hortatory
Exsposition
Danger
of Obesity for Human
We
often see people who are obese or obesity is everywhere. Obesity is excess body
weight as a result of excessive accumulation of body fat. Everyone
needs some body fat to store energy, as heat insulation, shock absorbent and other
functions.The average woman has more body fat than men. Comparisons between
normal-weight body fat is around 25-30% in women and 18-23% in men. Women with
more body fat than 30% body fat and men with more than 25% are considered
obese. Obesity is attributed to the fat, also caused by genetic or hereditary
factors, environmental factors, and psychological factors.
Obese
people susceptible to disease. Because they do not regularly eat the food they
contain carbohydrates and fat in excess. They rarely exercise so that the
accumulation of fat very quickly. Diseases that can attack the hypertension,
diabetes, stroke, heart attack, and others.
With
their large bodies they are hard to perform the activity. When their activities
may be instances when they would clean the house quickly exhausted. But most of
them have a lazy activity and chose to eat or sleep.
Large
bodies they also interfere with other people. Probably many other people feel
uncomfortable or disturbed. For example if obese people take the bus bound to
interfere kenyamaan others because their bulky. Or when obese people sitting at
the bus stop strong possible if
not a chair, the chair can be damaged.
What
is the solution to this problem? The solution is we have to keep eating
regularly, exercise regularly, keep clean, a lot of activity, and reduce your
intake of carbohydrates, sugar, meat, and that contain fat. We have lots of
vegetables and fruits. And for which not obese and obese people should respect
give advice for these patients.
7 komentar:
I think your text is so good. But, I fell it is a little like as descriptive text ( paragraph 1 ) ???
Are you same with me ?
thanks renn..I just give a little information about obesity.
boleh gk ya ???
I don't know? But, in hortatory generic structure is theren't descriptive. There is only thesis+ author's opinion ( paragraph 1 )
:-)
★ ★ ★ Risang, your text is very good. I like it!
You just have to put your view about obesity in the end of paragraph 1.
And then, it will be great if you put some connective words in the beginning of paragraph 2-4.
Overall, your text is very great!
Keep it up! (^o^)/
Risang, your text is amazing. but I do not understand several words you use in your sentences. do you want to teach me ?
and please comment my hortatory text...
Thanks guys to be cooperative here...Lets try to give another comment to others blog....Fighting....
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